Is my beginnig of book good? Any critiques would be accepted!?

I feel "horse hoove" should be more around "faint sound of horse hooves." I am confused if the writer means that Williamsburg is the messenger or if he recognizes the man at the door. The phrase "wiliam heard his voice and filled with joy, he was a messenger about 20 yrs or so," confuses me a little. I felt that "starting to cry" is a little sudden and direct. Maybe "he felt tears come to his eyes?" What color are his robes and shoes? The flow in he sentence "Osborne didn't like wialliam he was always annoyed by him and William could almost swear he hate his father too," seems to be a little strange. Should there be a period or comma in between any part of that? I like how Osborne forgets the man's name, it makes him seem more realistic. By showing the door man rolling his eyes the writer shows his emotions and habits better than they could with words. The ending has a good cliffhanger, but it seems as though it could be dramatized a bit. Does he ever talk with Tomas? It seems to skip through any greeting, even though they apparently share a history. Maybe the author could elaborate a little? The writer doesn't have to listen to any of this, because it's there story. It sounds like they have a god plot going and it leaves the reader hanging well. I feel there could be more physical descriptions about the scene and characters, however. :) Good job so far!